First, some of the sentences need references. If some information were not from your mind, you should provide sources.
Second, your sentences are generally long. Try to make shorter sentences.
Third, you should have a theory/framework and then have specific questions and hypotheses based on the theory and/or framework.
To further, help you in this process, So I attach theory and framework information for your reference. Please see attached a relevant presentation; it includes some examples of theories/conceptual frameworks and how these can work in specific research questions.
Fourth, please make your hypotheses with null and alternative hypotheses.
Fifth, you should provide how your research could contribute the positive social change
